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Standing on the branch so high
Behind you is the rising shine
Spirits leaping through the remaining mist
The morning cold but clear.
Your brothers standing by your side
Follows you with friendly eyes
Through the forest to the clearing
The takeoff for you is nearing.

Predators
Sons of the hunt
I can hear your calling for me
I am on my way!

The cloaking keeps you safe
A perfect hunting style
Like the tiger in the woods
You sleek by unseen.
I know you don't look like me
Yet I can still see
That to you I belong
Without you I am never free.

In the lands of the jungle
Saw you leaping from tree to tree
Your eyes watching me
Calling for me.
Take me to the stars
Where you belong.

Predator
Sons of the hunt
I heard your calls
With you by my side
I am now free
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Freeform poem, nothing much to be said. Poem speaks for itself.

I wish I was that girl...

This took me nearly three weeks to write. At first it was just some thoughts that I wrote down, then I tweaked it a little, got some constructive critique from my friend :iconl-e-h: and this is what I ended up with.

I wasn't sure which category to add this in, but hope its in the right section..
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feelings it invokes rather than its catchy rhymes, this one is sure to be a favorite. I can clearly see/feel the scene here and it really speaks to me as well as stir emotions
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For some reason half my post showed up, but here it is in full.
Absolutely lovely, What more is there to say. For all those who can appreciate a poem for the feelings it invokes, rather than its catchy rhymes, this one here is sure to be a favorite. I can so clearly see/feel the scene here and it really speaks to me and did stir emotions.
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=ziba Jun 1, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you Leh :3 *huggles* glad to know that my first poem in years wasn't a total disaster X3

That people actually understands the message means a lot :3
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beautiful!just beautiful!!
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=ziba Jun 1, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :3
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:iconiytj:
you're very welcome!!=D
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